I did my homework!

2019-08-16 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

학생이 쓴 원문

Whatever the genre it does, I love well-made movies without misogyny. However, The movie genre still conventionally contains misogyny still exists. Crime and noir movie is a male-dominated genre and It\'s stuck in machoism. Those kinds of movies usually use the sexual objectification of women for showing the male character\'s power and authority. This typical way to describe women makes a lot of problems considering that media influences one\'s way of thinking. It also confines the female character\'s diversity, and It means the female character who is out of this category is unacceptable or considered weird. It\'s really problematic. According to the static result of Korea, female consumers are more than male consumers in the film market. It\'s quite ironical that movie directors don\'t consider female consumers. So, We have to alert when it comes to selecting a movie and make a crack in solid male-bonding which reproduces the stereotypes of women.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름] [이름]!!

Yes!! You did your homework! Hahaha. You did really well too. It felt like I was reading a movie review which is great. Keep it up! ^^

~~Teacher Kate


1. Whatever the genre it does, I love well-made movies without misogyny. However, The movie genre still conventionally contains misogyny still exists. Crime and noir movie is a male-dominated genre and It\'s stuck in machoism.

>>Whatever genre it has, I love well-made stories without misogyny. However, movies that contain misogyny still exist. Crime and noir movies are a male-dominated genre and it\'s stuck in masculinity.
2. Those kinds of movies usually use the sexual objectification of women for showing the male character\'s power and authority. This typical way to describe women makes a lot of problems considering that media influences one\'s way of thinking.

>>CORRECT!
3. It also confines the female character\'s diversity, and It means the female character who is out of this category is unacceptable or considered weird. It\'s really problematic.

>>CORRECT!
4. According to the static result of Korea, female consumers are more than male consumers in the film market.
It\'s quite ironical that movie directors don\'t consider female consumers.

>>According to statistics in Korea, there are more female consumers than male consumers in the film market. It\'s quite ironical that movie directors don\'t consider female consumers.
5. So, We have to alert when it comes to selecting a movie and make a crack in solid male-bonding which reproduces the stereotypes of women.

>>So, We have to be alert when it comes to selecting a movie. This should make a crack in solid male-bonding which reproduces stereotypes of women.

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