I did my homework again!

2019-05-06 · 첨삭 강사 Michelle

학생이 쓴 원문

Actually, these days my life is packed with works and studies So I don\'t have time to feel bored! But sometimes I feel like I\'m stuck in a rut. Moreover, I think it\'s a common emotion or maybe the phenomenon that every Korean woman can feel. Especially, It\'s about pressure. Because of male-centric society, Korean women have lots of unspoken regulations. To come over those regulations and achieve the goals that they want, Women have to work harder and make their ability better than man. This pressure is also made by competitive society and confines meaningless action. Some Korean women, so misinterpret a rest as a meaningless action. I was one of them. I abused myself and sometimes blamed myself. After lots of trials, I found a way to solve my inner pressure. To prevent mental and physical exhaustion, I write a diary. Writing a diary keeps my emotion healthy so I can make sound self-reflection. Now It\'s a really important method to set my path and make a conversation with myself.

강사 첨삭

Hello Seo Yeong! Thank you for answering your homework again! Keep it up! See you later! (^^,)


Actually, these days my life is packed with works and studies.

>>> Actually, these days my life is packed with a lot of work and studies. 


 So I don\'t have time to feel bored!

>>> CORRECT!


 But sometimes I feel like I\'m stuck in a rut.

>>> CORRECT!


 Moreover, I think it\'s a common emotion or maybe the phenomenon that every Korean woman can feel.

>>> Moreover, I think it\'s a common emotion or maybe the phenomenon that every Korean woman feels.


 Especially, it\'s about pressure.

>>> CORRECT!


 Because of male-centric society, Korean women have lots of unspoken regulations.

>>> CORRECT!


 To come over those regulations and achieve the goals that they want,

>>> CORRECT!


 Women have to work harder and make their ability better than man.

>>> CORRECT!


 This pressure is also made by competitive society and confines meaningless action.

>>> CORRECT!


 Some Korean women, so misinterpret a rest as a meaningless action.

>>> Some Korean women, misinterpret rest as a meaningless action.


 I was one of them. I abused myself and sometimes blamed myself.

>>> CORRECT!


 After lots of trials, I found a way to solve my inner pressure.

>>> CORRECT!


 To prevent mental and physical exhaustion, I write a diary.

>>> CORRECT!


 Writing a diary keeps my emotion healthy so I can make sound self-reflection.

>>> CORRECT!


 Now it\'s a really important method to set my path and make a conversation with myself.

>>> CORRECT!


_T MICHELLE_

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