I dined with my co-workers
학생이 쓴 원문
I will tell you on detail about dining last night.
Our team dine a month periodically.
It was special dine, a welcome party for the new employee that I mentioned you yesterday,
We ate oyster foods in korean restaurant and drink.
After We had dinner, We went to the billyards club and
We enjoyed the game of billiards.
We made a bet with paying for lunch tomorrow.
Unfortunately, I losed the game and I paid for lunch today.
강사 첨삭
Mr. [이름]^^
That's too bad. You must have spent a lot of money paing for your lunch.hehehe. You should practice billiards more so that next time you will not lose.hehehe
See you later.
fierce&love,
~Ella
MY CORRECTIONS^^:
I will tell you on detail about dining last night.
>>I will tell you in detail about my dining out last night.Our team dine a month periodically.
>>Our team dines out once every month.It was special dine, a welcome party for the new employee that I mentioned you yesterday,
>>It was a special dinner, a welcome party for the new employee that I mentioned to you yesterday.We ate oyster foods in korean restaurant and drink.
>>We ate oysters in a Korean restaurant and drank some alcohol.After We had dinner, We went to the billyards club and We enjoyed the game of billiards.
>>After having dinner, we went to the billiards club and enjoyed the game.We made a bet with paying for lunch tomorrow.
>>We made a bet in which whoever loses will pay for the lunch tomorrow.Unfortunately, I losed the game and I paid for lunch today.
>>Unfortunately, I lost the game and paid for lunch today.
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