I disagree about better place is countryside for children.
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ESSAY: It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.
I disagree about it.
Even though I know some advantages about living in the countryside, for example fresh air, forest, ground, walking in nature etc, but there is significant disadvantage of living in the countryside. It is lack of opportunity of good quality education.
If your children living in the countryside, most of the case you should go far away from your living location to go school. Maybe it should be hard to your children to go far away everyday.
This problem is also same as old children. As far as I know, Most of the high level university is located in a big city not the countryside. If you living in the country side, you should send your children alone to enter the good university. From my experience it is not easy to live alone. Your children should have hard time after entering the university.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I disagree about it.
>>> CORRECT
Even though I know some advantages about living in the countryside, for example fresh air, forest, ground, walking in nature etc, but there is a significant disadvantage of living in the countryside.
Even though I know some advantages about living in the countryside, for example fresh air, forest, ground, walking in nature etc, but there is a significant disadvantage of living in the countryside.
>>> CORRECT
It is lack of opportunity of good quality education.
>>> It lacks opportunity for good quality education.
If your children living in the countryside, most of the case you should go far away from your living location to go school.
>>> If your children are living in the countryside, in most cases, you should go far away from your house to school.
Maybe it should be hard to your children to go far away everyday.
>>> Maybe it would be hard for your children to go far every day.
This problem is also same as old children.
This problem is also same as old children.
>>> This problem is also the same with teenagers.
As far as I know, Most of the high level university is located in a big city not the countryside.
>>> As far as I know, most of the high level universities is located in big cities not in the countryside.
If you living in the countryside, you should send your children alone to enter the good university.
>>> If you living in the countryside, you should send your children alone to enter a good university.
From my experience it is not easy to live alone.
>>> CORRECT
Your children should have hard time after entering the university.
>>> Your children might have a hard time after entering the university.
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