I don\'t do social media.
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Hi Da [이름],
Many people in today\'s world use social media platforms like Facebook, Twitter, Snapchat, YouTube, and Instagram to find and connect with others. While each has its advantages, it is essential to keep in mind that social media will never be able to replace face-to-face interaction. Everyone is different and there is no specific amount of time spent on social media, or the frequency you check for updates, or the number of posts you make that indicates your use is becoming unhealthy. Rather, it has to do with the impact time spent on social media has on your mood and other aspects of your life, along with your motivations for using it. If, for instance, your use of social media causes you to put off having real-life relationships, keeps you from going to work or school, or makes you feel jealous, angry, or sad, it could be a problem. Essentially, in the event that you\'re roused to utilize social media since you\'re exhausted or desolate, or need to present something on make others envious or upset, it very well might be an ideal opportunity to reconsider your social media habits.
~Teacher Cathy ^^
I don\'t use social media because when I was younger, I used that but it wasn\'t good for me
>>I don’t use social media anymore because I realized it wasn’t good for me when I was using it before.
I was spending all my time for it, and I was always nervous because I was wondering who liked my pictures
>>I spend all of my time on it, and I was always anxious about wondering who liked my photos.
And then some point, I understand this is not good for me
>>And then at some point, I understood that this is not good for me.
So I don\'t use social media now, but sometimes I used it
>>So, I don’t use social media now as much as before.
Because my friends use it and I was wondering what people thought.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Because my friends use it and I always kept wondering what people thought.
And I wasn\'t interested in celebrities, So I didn’t even follow them.
>>CORRECT
OR>>And I didn’t have any interest in celebrities, so I don’t follow any.
And the only celebrity I\'m interested in is you, teacher :)
>>CORRECT
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