I don\'t want to be a knight

2021-10-12 · 첨삭 강사 Debbie

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In my opinion, knight is very important job but I don\'t want to be. I\'ll cite two reason why I don\'t want to be. First, my body type don\'t agree with this job. I\'m thine and I\'m not healthy(?). So I think if I be a knight, I can\'t fight well with enemies. Second, I \'m not good at see blood. Knight have to kill enemies well, but I think i can\'t fight with enemies well.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Daniel!  Your homework is well-organized and easy to understand. Very good! Just please take note of the ff:

a.  Please focus on the proper use of articles.
b. Please study about the second conditional.

- Teacher Debbie         


In my opinion, knight is very important job but I don\'t want to be.
>> In my opinion, being a knight is a very important job, but I wouldn\'t want to be one.

 I\'ll cite two reason why I don\'t want to be.
>> I\'ll cite two reasons why.

First, my body type don\'t agree with this job. 
>> First, my body type wouldn\'t be fit for this job.

I\'m thine and I\'m not healthy(?).
>> I\'m thin, and I\'m not healthy.

 So I think if I be a knight, I can\'t fight well with enemies.
>> Therefore, if I were a knight, I couldn\'t fight well with the enemies.

Second, I \'m not good at see blood. 
>> Second, I don\'t like seeing blood.

Knight have to kill enemies well, but I think i can\'t fight with enemies well.
>> Knights have to kill enemies, but I think I couldn\'t fight with them well. 

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