I don\'t want to be many things...
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In modern society,many people are struggling from many problems, emotionally, psychologically or physically.Thankfully, we have a lot of experts in those fields, psychological counselors or therapists, and doctors.As you know they cure people who are suffering from various problems,and some people can live controlling their problems thank to them. Are these jobs good in their side?They always meet people who have pain,it could influence them.These jobs are precious but I don\'t want to see people\'s pain in many parts of my life. In the same way, I\'ll refuse to be a police official or a lawyer. Police is always involved in criminals, a lawyer is living in the middle of arguments. I think I can\'t afford it even if I could get a lot of money. Celebrity is one of jobs what I refuse.People treat their privacy as something for public, a bad rumor can kill them. But they sometimes allow those terrible things because of fame.What a poor life! If a job hurt myself,I must refuse it for my life.
강사 첨삭
Hi!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts and viewpoints about the different jobs you mentioned.
I totally agree with what you said- if a job harms our well-being, it may be something we should refuse. Of course, this can be different if someone is willing to accept those challenges and feels ready for them. ^^
~ Teacher Gina
In modern society,many people are struggling from many problems, emotionally, psychologically or physically.
>> In modern society, many people are struggling with many problems, emotionally, psychologically, or physically.
Thankfully, we have a lot of experts in those fields, psychological counselors or therapists, and doctors.
>> CORRECT.
As you know they cure people who are suffering from various problems,and some people can live controlling their problems thank to them.
>> As you know, they cure people who are suffering from various problems, and some people can live controlling their problems thanks to them.
Are these jobs good in their side?
>> Are these jobs good on their side?
They always meet people who have pain, it could influence them.
>> CORRECT.
These jobs are precious but I don\'t want to see people\'s pain in many parts of my life.
>> CORRECT.
In the same way, I\'ll refuse to be a police official or a lawyer.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: For the same reason, I would not want to become a police officer or a lawyer.
Police is always involved in criminals, a lawyer is living in the middle of arguments.
>> A police officer is always dealing with criminals, and a lawyer is often in the middle of arguments.
I think I can\'t afford it even if I could get a lot of money.
>> CORRECT.
Celebrity is one of jobs what I refuse.
>> Celebrity is one of the jobs I want to refuse.
People treat their privacy as something for public, a bad rumor can kill them.
>> People treat their privacy as something public, a bad rumor can kill them.
But they sometimes allow those terrible things because of fame.
>> CORRECT.
What a poor life! If a job hurt myself,I must refuse it for my life.
>> What a poor life! If a job harms my well-being, I must refuse it.
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