I don\'t want to meet people

2021-12-09 · 첨삭 강사 Debbie

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If I am a ghost, I don\'t want to surprise people because I know that surprising feeling. When I was surprised because of horror game, in that day\'s night it was hard to sleep. So, if I am a ghost I want live or haunt in deep ocean. Since people can\'t see deep ocean, I want to haunt in deep ocean where is hard to meet people. However, people can travel deep ocean. At that time, I will go to the Jupiter where no one can see me and be hard to sleep.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Daniel! How considerate of you!   If you were a ghost, you would be like Casper. Do you know him? He is a friendly ghost. He doesn\'t like hurting people. I\'ll tell you more about him tomorrow. 

- Teacher Debbie

If I am a ghost, I don\'t want to surprise people because I know that surprising feeling. 
>> If I were a ghost, I wouldn\'t want to surprise people because I know the feeling of being surprised. 

When I was surprised because of horror game, in that day\'s night it was hard to sleep.
>> When I got surprised because of a horror game, it was hard for me to sleep that night.

So, if I am a ghost I want live or haunt in deep ocean. Since people can\'t see deep ocean, I want to haunt in deep ocean where is hard to meet people. 
>>  Therefore, if I were a ghost, I would want to live or haunt in the deep ocean since people can\'t see it.

However, people can travel deep ocean. At that time, I will go to the Jupiter where no one can see me and be hard to sleep.
>> However, if people could already travel to the deep ocean, I would go to Jupiter where no one could see me and just sleep soundly.


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