I finished my assignment.

2014-03-12 · 첨삭 강사 Rowena

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1. What factors do you think will maintain your interest in this company? I am interested in studying construction. I know this company is making a PC Corrugated steel pipe and has an intellectual property and a patent in this field. I think I can learn many things from this company and I would like to make my carrier up through this company 2. What are your weaknesses? How about your strengths? My weakness is that I feel bored easily when I do meaningless things. I don’t like to stick in the chair for a whole day. So I try to change my mood for improving my working effectiveness. My strength is that I don’t give up my task when I start. I don’t like to say “It is impossible”. We don’t know the result is before trying it. So I will finish my job when it will be given to me 3. Why would you leave your previous for this? I’d like to challenge myself. My current job does not have a chance to learn a new thing. I’d like to do business with Chinese client. See you soon

강사 첨삭

Hello there!:)

It\'s T. Rowena. I am so sorry about my absence in the class again. I really hate this. But I couldn\'t\' t help it.

I juts arrived an hour ago for my remaining classes. Anyway, your answer for the questions are good. You have good points but be careful with your syntax.

Do check these below.

See you in class. Always take care.

T. Rowena



1. What factors do you think will maintain your interest in this company?


I am interested in studying construction.

>>correct!

I know this company is making a PC Corrugated steel pipe and has an intellectual property and a patent in this field.

>> What I know is, this company is manufacturing  a PC Corrugated steel pipe and has an intellectual property and a patent in this field.

I think I can learn many things from this company and I would like to make my carrier up through this company 

>> I think I can learn many things from this company and I would like to level up my career through this company 
 

2. What are your weaknesses? How about your strengths?


 My weakness is that I feel bored easily when I do meaningless things.

>>correct!

OR: >> My weakness is that I easily feel bored if I do meaningless things.

I don’t like to stick in the chair for a whole day.

>>I don\'t like to stick on the chair for the whole day.

OR: >> I don\'t want to be sitting on my chair doing nothing meaningful the whole day.

So I try to change my mood for improving my working effectiveness.

>>So I try to change my mood to improve my working effectiveness.

My strength is that I don’t give up my task when I start.

>>correct!

I don’t like to say “It is impossible”.

>> Better: I don\'t like saying \"It is impossible \".

We don’t know the result is before trying it.

>> We won\'t know the outcome without trying.

So I will finish my job when it will be given to me 

>>  Better: So I make sure to finish tasks given to me.


 3. Why would you leave your previous for this?
I’d like to challenge myself.

>>correct!

My current job does not have a chance to learn a new thing.

>> My current job does not give me the chance to learn new things.

I’d like to do business with Chinese client.

>>I\'d like to do business with Chinese clients.

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