I got a car for gift from my parent when I was 30 years old

2020-07-02 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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I got a car from my parent when my daughter was bone in 2005 the only reason they gave me a car that they want to be safe to my daughter. because I got a old car in that time so they bought me a new car I was extreme happy. I gave a tow big present as my first daughter and the car and I thought what I want them to buy me when I have next baby..

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]. I had a nice time reading your homework today. Your parents are very generous. I was wondering what you bought yourself when you had your second daughter...hmmm^^ Let\'s talk about in class one of these days. I look forward to it. ~ Teacher Jane c\",) 


I got a car for gift from my parent when I was 30 years old
>>> I got a car as a gift from my parents when I was 30 years old. 


I got a car from my parent when my daughter was bone in 2005
>>> I got a car from my parents when my daughter was born in 2005. 

the only reason they gave me a car that they want to be safe to my daughter. because I got a old car in that time
>>> The only reason they gave me a car is they want my daughter to be safe because I got an old car that time. 

so they bought me a new car
>>> So they bought me a new car. 

I was extreme happy.
>>> I was extremely happy. 

I gave a tow big present as my first daughter and the car
>>> I got my daughter and the car as my two big presents. 

and I thought what I want them to buy me when I have next baby..
>>> And I thought of what I wanted to buy when I had another baby. 


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