I hate the media
학생이 쓴 원문
For 20 years, my family has not been watching TV.
2 years ago we had not internet and computer too.
Even we lived without any telephone number for 7 years.
Friends tell us that you are strange couple.
Some day my son's teacher told him, “Is there any criminal problem in your parents?”
The reason of those is that we hate mass media.
Ruler uses mass media to tell lies and make people zombie.
I do not want to be zombie, I hate mass media as usual.
강사 첨삭
Hello Ms. [이름],
I was surprised while reading your essay.
Anyway, media is defined as any means of mass communication used by the general public. This includes television, radio (music), magazines and newspapers, and social media sites on the internet. The media a collective term has grown exponentially as means of popular past-times and instant communication; however, it has also proved to be an effective way to manipulate standards and beliefs held by the public. As media focuses largely on the teenage populace, it cannot be ignored that while time changes, socially acceptable standards change with it. This transformation is also credited to the media\'s influence on society, as it is as responsible for setting the standard as society itself.
Television is a considerably new form of media, but its importance is undeniable. While television is used to broadcast news and current events, it has always had an entertainment factor and is undoubtedly the most influential form of media out there. Television these days is a significant tool used for entertainment and a source of information. Being exposed to the influences of television such as advertisements for unhealthy foods or unhealthy lifestyles can greatly influence one\'s own morals and beliefs, and eventually alter one\'s own lifestyle choices. It is obvious that children reflect the actions of their role-models, and these are usually movie stars or musicians, both of which are usually shown on television at least once during their careers. Also, movies offer a chance to enter into another, more exciting world. Visual portrayals of action packed lives led by beautiful people can often leave viewers feeling unsatisfied with their own lives, and this may be the cause of rising levels of violence among the younger generations, especially in girls.
Since video games became available, they were an instant hit. People no longer needed to leave the house to be entertained. A parent did not have to worry about the safety of their child if that child was playing in the house on his or her video game. Now, gaming is a large industry and is an acceptable past time for all ages. Experts worry that too much gaming time can interfere with a person\'s social life, school performance and family/friend relationships. Games and television are closely connected, as the television is usually used in gaming, and television media also promotes gaming products.
Even though media is not the only source of standards, it remains to be one of the most influential among teenagers. Music, television, games, social sites and of course, magazines, all contribute to the growing expectations of how people should act in any situation. When looking at media and its influence in general, it can be concluded that; firstly it has the bigget impact on younger generations, and secondly it is a large contributing factor to the development or destruction of key social and physical encounters between consumers. The media influences us as consumers more than we may care to realize, especially in areas of clothing, food and desirable objects to make life easier or more fun. It has also proven to affect the public\'s standards regarding relationships between young people - what is acceptable of them in any situation, and also what is expected of them.Teacher Sophia
Here are your corrections:
For 20 years, my family has not been watching TV.
>> My family hasn\'t watched TV for 20 years.2 years ago we had not internet and computer too.
>> We didn\'t have internet and computer 2 years ago.Even we lived without any telephone number for 7 years.
>> We also didn\'t have telephones for 7 years.Friends tell us that you are strange couple.
>> Our friends told us that we are strange.Some day my son\'s teacher told him, “Is there any criminal problem in your parents?”
>> One time, my teacher\'s son told asked him this question : \"Do your parents have mental problems?\"The reason of those is that we hate mass media.
>> One of the reasons why we don\'t have a television is that we hate the mass media.Ruler uses mass media to tell lies and make people zombie.
>> The government officials use the mass media to tell lies and make people stupid of following them.I do not want to be zombie, I hate mass media as usual.
>> I don\'t want to be stupid that\'s why I hate the mass media.
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