I have never worried about online security.
학생이 쓴 원문
Online security is important when we doing computer with money.
But I am doing my computer without money.
I always doing my computer without money.
Because it is more easy to use computer.
Problem relating with money is hard to solve.
Thanks for reading.
Bye.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]. Thank you for your effort in answering your homework. Great job there!^_^
Online security is important when we doing computer with money.
>>>Online security is important when we use a computer with money involved.
But I am doing my computer without money.
>>> But, I am using my computer not related to money.
I always doing my computer without money.
>>>I always use my computer which is not money related.
Because it is more easy to use computer.
>>>Because it is easier to use a computer.
Problem relating with money is hard to solve.
>>>Problem related to money is hard to solve.
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