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I heard the news about the best job in the world.

>> Correct!
About 4 years ago, In the news paper one advertisement was released.

>> Did you mean: About four years ago, I read it in one of the advertisement that was released in the newspaper.
Managing the hotel in the island was the best job in the world.

>> Managing a hotel in an island was the best job in the world.
You can bring one person if you were chosen.

>> Correct!
Only you have to do is cleaning tiles and Swimming pool.

>> You only have to do is to clean the tiles and swimming pool.
and then, you enjoy your vacation in the beautiful island.

>> And then you can enjoy your vacation in a beautiful island.
These things make you get 150000 dollar in six month.

>> These things can help you earn 150,000 dollars in six months.
The name of island is Queens island.

>> Correct!
the advertisement was released to gather appliers.

>> Did you mean: The advertisement was released to gather applicants.
Through this advertisement, the hotel of Queens island got an amazing benefit.

>> Correct!