I hope you read this article It\'s about the sexual exploitation crime in Korea

2020-03-23 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

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There may be highly violent and sexual content as this deals with a serious digital sexual exploitation crime happening in South Korea. Currently, in South Korea, numerous women are suffering from sexual exploitation and violence due to a series of atrocious digital sex crimes called the “Nth Room” (N번방). This is what happened so far. At first, a criminal using the nickname “박사” (Baksa; means Doctor in Korean) sent Twitter messages to the victims saying, “Your private pictures might be exposed on the internet, so please check this website to see if it is really you”. The website was actually a decoy - once the victims clicked the website link, a fake Twitter popped up. Victims thinking that it was the real Twitter typed their username and password, which were immediately shared with the criminals. The shared username and password enabled the criminals to illegally gather more personal information like telephone numbers, home addresses, and family. ​

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름] [이름]!
This is truly disturbing news. To think that there are people out there who do this is revolting! Always be careful when clicking things online. ^^
~~Teacher Kate

There may be highly violent and sexual content as this deals with a serious digital sexual exploitation crime happening in South Korea.
>>>CORRECT!
Currently, in South Korea, numerous women are suffering from sexual exploitation and violence due to a series of atrocious digital sex crimes called the “Nth Room” (N번방). This is what happened so far.
>>>CORRECT!
At first, a criminal using the nickname “박사” (Baksa; means Doctor in Korean) sent Twitter messages to the victims saying, “Your private pictures might be exposed on the internet, so please check this website to see if it is really you”. 
>>>CORRECT! (NOTE: Oh my god! )
The website was actually a decoy - once the victims clicked the website link, a fake Twitter popped up. 
>>>CORRECT! 
Victims thinking that it was the real Twitter typed their username and password, which were immediately shared with the criminals. 
>>>CORRECT! 
The shared username and password enabled the criminals to illegally gather more personal information like telephone numbers, home addresses, and family.
>>>CORRECT! (NOTE: This is so creepy! )

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