I hope you read this article It\'s about the sexual exploitation crime in Korea 4

2020-03-24 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

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Most of the victims are in their late teens to early twenties. According to a member in the “Nth Room” chatroom, two women become new “slaves” every day. Would report to the police work? A man who went inside one of the “Nth Room” chatrooms reported this crime to the Korean police as he was astonished by the brutality. The report was first handed to the Cyber Crime Investigation Unit, but was passed to the Women and Adolescent Crime Investigation Unit, and then to the Violence Investigation Unit, then back to the Cyber Crime Investigation Unit. The investigation was never properly done. The man who originally reported the crime started to contribute to the growth of the “Nth Room” by re-selling footages as he found out that the lack of investigation created a safe environment for the criminals. The atrocity of the criminals didn’t stop here. When a middle schooler girl found out that her younger sister who goes to elementary school was suffering from sexual exploitation at the “Nth ​

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Hello [이름] [이름]!
Thank you for the information. Let\'s all be careful! ^^
~~Teacher Kate

Most of the victims are in their late teens to early twenties. 
>>CORRECT!
According to a member in the “Nth Room” chatroom, two women become new “slaves” every day. 
>>CORRECT!
Would report to the police work? 
>>Would reporting to the police work? 
A man who went inside one of the “Nth Room” chatrooms reported this crime to the Korean police as he was astonished by the brutality. 
>>CORRECT!
The report was first handed to the Cyber Crime Investigation Unit, but was passed to the Women and Adolescent Crime Investigation Unit, and then to the Violence Investigation Unit, then back to the Cyber Crime Investigation Unit. 
>>CORRECT!
The investigation was never properly done. 
>>CORRECT! (NOTE: What the heck?)
The man who originally reported the crime started to contribute to the growth of the “Nth Room” by re-selling footages as he found out that the lack of investigation created a safe environment for the criminals. 
>>CORRECT!
The atrocity of the criminals didn’t stop here. When a middle schooler girl found out that her younger sister who goes to elementary school was suffering from sexual exploitation at the “Nth.
>>CORRECT!

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