I like a Maroon5!!!!!!!

2012-05-12 · 첨삭 강사 karen

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I like a Maroon5.because Maroon5 is good at sing and music is very very good. Maroon5's songs are misrey,This love,Sunday morning and now on Maroon5 sing payphone. Payphone is my favorite song. Buy the way How do I know Maroon5? I am known by my father.And I listened 'Move like jagger'. It is very good song. Because it's very interesting. And I want to come Maroon5 in Korea If they come I'll go concert.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]. How are you? Thank you for sending your compostion. I also like Maroon5 very much! It\'s good that you like Payphone. It is also my favorite song. The next song that I like best from Maroon5 is Sunday Morning. Anyway, I will tell you more songs on Monday (= I hope you will like them too! Take care this weekend and I will call you again soon! 

~t.Karen ^._.^

I like a Maroon5.because Maroon5 is good at sing and music is very very good.

>> ** You can use your pronoun [they] and [their] to avoid using the noun Maroon5 over and over agian.

>> I like Maroon5 because they are good at singing and their music is very very good. 

Maroon5\'s songs are misrey,This love,Sunday morning and now on Maroon5 sing payphone.

>> ** Always capitalize [big letter] the first letter of titles.

>> ** Be careful with your spelling: [Misery].

>>  Maroon5\'s songs are Misery,This love,Sunday morning and now, their latest song is Payphone.

Payphone is my favorite song.

>> Correct! (=

Buy the way How do I know Maroon5?

>> Are you wondering, how I came to know about Maroon5?

I am known by my father.And I listened \'Move like jagger\'.

>> ** Always capitalize [big letter] the first letter of titles.

>> I found about it through my father and I listened to [Moves like Jagger].

It is very good song.  Because it\'s very interesting.

>> ** Consider sentence revision.

>> ** Combine your sentences together. 

>> It\'s a very good song because it\'s very interesting.

And I want to come Maroon5 in Korea If they come I\'ll go concert.

>> ** Consider sentence revision. 

>> I want Maroon5 to go to Korea and I will go to their concert.  

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