I like a soccer.

2011-05-27 · 첨삭 강사 Ella

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I've had a special experience in last summer. One day, as soon as my father came back home, he turned on TV. In his hands, there are hopes and snacks, and he said to me. Minsuk!, today is the day of soccer game between our country and Greek. Let's see the game together. Father was excited condition, I decided to see the soccer game with him. It was started,and I fell into that as time passes. In that game, the national athletes of our country palyed hard on their honour, finally our national team won two to zero.

강사 첨삭

[이름], Usually national team players have a very strong sense of nationalism. They have a strong desire to bring back honor and pride to their country. I've had a special experience in last summer. >>I've had a special experience last summer.One day, as soon as my father came back home, he turned on TV. >>One day, as soon as my father came back home, he turned on the TV.In his hands, there are hopes and snacks, and he said to me. >>In his hands, there were hope and snacks.Minsuk!, today is the day of soccer game between our country and Greek. Let's see the game together. >>And he said, Minsuk! Today is the soccer game between our country and Greece. Let's watch it together.Father was excited condition, I decided to see the soccer game with him. >>Father was so excited, so I decided to watch the soccer game with him.It was started,and I fell into that as time passes. >>It started and I was so into it as time passed.In that game, the national athletes of our country palyed hard on their honour, finally our national team won two to zero. >>In that game, the Korean national athletes played hard for their country's honor. Finally, our team won two to zero.  

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