I like saving money, and I need five thousand won in one week.
학생이 쓴 원문
Everybody will like money. Me too, I like money a lot. If I have a lot of money, I can have anything I want. Accessories, clothes, and a lot of food etc. If my money over the hundred million!! I can buy a car! Like this, I like money very much. Also, you question to me, How much money do you need in one week? If I answer this question, I need five thousand won in one week. I have to buy stationery, a snack, and a dinner material. Writing an essay, I think about this. If I have a hundred million, I will donation to orphanage, because these days orphan children are getting child abuse from children\'s parent.
강사 첨삭
Good evening Maria!
All of us need money to live. You are right, we all should love money and earning it.
Well, you really have a good heart thinking about the children in the orphanage. You are very lucky because you have parents who love and take care of you. That is better than any amount of money there is in the world.
Thank you so much for doing your homework. You are the best!
-T. Donna =)
>> Correct!
Or: Everybody likes money.
Accessories, clothes, and a lot of food etc. If my money over the hundred million!! I can buy a car!
>> I can buy accessories, clothes, a lot of food, etc. if my money is over a hundred million, I can buy a car!
Like this, I like money very much. Also, you question to me, How much money do you need in one week?
>> In this way, I like money very much. Also, you asked: \"How much money do you need in one week?\"
If I answer this question, I need five thousand won in one week. I have to buy stationery, a snack, and a dinner material.
>> Correct!
Writing an essay, I think about this. If I have a hundred million, I will donation to orphanage, because these days orphan children are getting child abuse from children\'s parent.
>> In writing an essay, I think about this: if I have a hundred million, I will do a donation to the orphanage because these days orphan children are getting child abuse from children\'s parent.
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