I like winter mount

2020-10-16 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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It is cold more and more. Fall is short and winter is long. I don`t like winter because of cold. When I was a young. I liked winter . I liked snow and winter sport. I liked to play snowboard and to go up mount. Specially I liked mount that was coverd snow. There is a lot of mount in Korea. It is very beautifully in Gangwondo. Do you know Sobeak mount?. I went there 10 years ago. I and my wife want to go mount suddenly at that time. so we started to drive to there. Actually we didn`t want something. we was hard to go up mount. but we arrived top of there. we saw amazing view. There was little snow. The view that green and white color painted mount was amazing. After several yeas my family went winter mount. The mount was covered snow whole. Many people were in there. when we went up the mount. as if there was a city. I remember the amazing view in top of mount. I didn`t forgot that.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir John. Thank you for this. The view seems to be really amazing since you never forget how it looked like.

- T. Beth
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It is cold more and more.

>>> It\'s getting much colder.

Fall is short and winter is long.

>>> correct
I don`t like winter because of cold.

>>> I don\'t like winter because of the cold.
When I was a young. I liked winter . I liked snow and winter sport.

>>> When I was young, I liked the winter.

I liked snow and winter sport.

>>> correct
I liked to play snowboard and to go up mount.

>>> I liked to play snowboarding and to go up the mountain.

Specially I liked mount that was coverd snow.

>>> I specially liked mountains covered with snow.
There is a lot of mount in Korea.

>>> There are a lot of mountains in Korea.
It is very beautifully in Gangwondo.

>>> It is very beautiful in Gangwondo.

Do you know Sobeak mount?.

>>> Do you know Sobeak mountain?
I went there 10 years ago.

>>> correct
I and my wife want to go mount suddenly at that time. so we started to drive to there.

>>> I and my wife suddenly wanted to go to that mountain at that time so we started to drive going there.

Actually we didn`t want something.

>>> We actually didn\'t want anything.
we was hard to go up mount. but we arrived top of there we saw amazing view.

>>> We had a hard time going up the mountain but we arrived at the top and there we saw an amazing view.

There was little snow.

>>> correct
The view that green and white color painted mount was amazing.

>>> The view of green and white color painted the mountain and it was amazing.

After several yeas my family went winter mount.

>>> After several years, my family went to a mountain in winter.

The mount was covered snow whole.

>>> The mountain was all covered with snow.

Many people were in there. when we went up the mount. as if there was a city.

>>> OR: There were many people there when we went up the mountain as if it was in the city.

I remember the amazing view in top of mount.

>>> I remember the amazing view on top of mount.

I didn`t forgot that.

>>> I never forget that.

>>> OR: I would never forget that.

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