I lost..... :(
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When I was 11, I bought my cell phone. That was my first cell phpne. Almost my friends have cell phone, but I didn\'t have. So I felt lonely.
So how happy I was when I got my first cell phone? But, I lost it in our family trip. After we went to church, we went to restaurant to eat lunch. After we ate lunch, we came back to our home. But I felt emptiness. Finally, I found that I lost my cell phone. And then we went to the restaurant to find it, but we could not find it. That was a terrible memory.
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Hello, [이름] U!
Thanks for sharing your experience. I hope you will not lose your phone again. :D
Anyway, you did great! See you tomorrow~
-T.Jhozel
When I was 11, I bought my cell phone.
>> I got my first cell phone when I was 11 years old.
That was my first cell phpne.
>> That was my first cell phpne.
Almost my friends have cell phone, but I didn\'t have. So I felt lonely.
>> My friends all had cell phones, but I didn\'t.
So how happy I was when I got my first cell phone?
>> So imagine my joy when I received my first cell phone.
But, I lost it in our family trip.
>> Correct!
>> OR: But I misplaced it during our family trip.
>> OR: But I misplaced it during our family trip.
After we went to church, we went to restaurant to eat lunch.
>> Correct!
After we ate lunch, we came back to our home. But I felt emptiness.
>> We returned home after eating lunch. But I felt empty.
Finally, I found that I lost my cell phone.
>> Finally, I discovered that I had misplaced my cellphone.
And then we went to the restaurant to find it, but we could not find it.
>> Then we went to the restaurant to look for it, but we couldn\'t find it.
That was a terrible memory.
>> Correct!
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