I love four season
학생이 쓴 원문
I prefer diverse climates to one climate. Of course One season is good. Why? Whenever climate is changed, they don\'t need to buy clothes! But.. they can\'t look at the snow or rain. Though clothes\'cost is so much, I want to enjoy diverse season! When it comes spring, I want to look at the cherry blossoms , go to the Hangang river. ( there, l wil drink beer and have chicken = I will enjoy 치맥) when it comes summer, I like to swim. And winter, I want to ride a ski! Diverse season can diverse interest! I love four season!
강사 첨삭
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I prefer diverse climates to one climate.
>>> I prefer to experience various climates.
Of course One season is good.
>>> Of course one season is also good.
Why? Whenever climate is changed, they don\'t need to buy clothes!
>>> Why? Because whenever the climate changes, I don\'t need to buy new clothes!
But.. they can\'t look at the snow or rain.
>>> However, I can\'t enjoy the snow nor the rain.
Though clothes\'cost is so much, I want to enjoy diverse season!
>>> Though clothes\' cost so much, I want to enjoy diverse seasons!
When it comes spring, I want to look at the cherry blossoms , go to the Hangang river.
>>> When spring comes, I want to see the cherry blossom festival , and go to Hangang river.
( there, l wil drink beer and have chicken = I will enjoy 치맥)
>>> ( there, l will drink beer and have chicken = I will enjoy 치맥)
when it comes summer, I like to swim.
>>>> In summer, I like swimming.
And winter, I want to ride a ski!
>>> In winter, I want like skiing.
Diverse season can diverse interest! I love four season!
>>> Diverse seasons can give me diverse interests! I love the four seasons!
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