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When I came home over midnight, my wife and baby fell asleep deeply. They didn't know that I came back home. Today, I had an appointment with my client at the dinner. Although I had come home late two days straight, I had to go there because the client is very important for my company. We had a lot of beverageTonight, so I'm dizzy now. I don't like that meeting but I have to do. As I'm promoted in my company, I have more responsibility for relationship with my client. It makes me tired. And I always feel sorry for my wife, who have been struggling to grow our baby. Tommorow, I don't have no plan after work. I must come back home early, Maybe before 7pm, and I think It would better that I will have dinner with her together.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
I'm happy that you don't need to go home late tonight!
Like I suggested earlier, buy your wife something nice tonight, surprise her! buy her favorite cake or chocolate or somethingyou know she likes. Just a simple thought for her before you guys eat dinner tonight!
You are such a sweet husband, [이름]. ^^
Here are my corrections:
When I came home over midnight, my wife and baby fell asleep deeply.
>>> When I went home past midnight last night, I found my wife and baby ast asleep.
They didn't know that I came back home.
>>>Correct.
Today, I had an appointment with my client at the dinner.
>>> I had a dinner meeting with a client today.
Although I had come home late two days straight, I had to go there because the client is very important for my company.
>>> Although I went home late for two days straight, I still attended this meeting because this client is very important to my company.
We had a lot of beverageTonight, so I'm dizzy now.
>>> We drank a lot that's why I'm dizzy now.
I don't like that meeting but I have to do.
>>> I don't like to attend to that meeting but I have no choice.
As I'm promoted in my company, I have more responsibility for relationship with my client.
>>> As being promoted in my company, I have more responsibility like building rapport with the clients.
It makes me tired.
>>> It makes me feel tired.
And I always feel sorry for my wife, who have been struggling to grow our baby.
>>> And I feel sorry for my wife who is having a hard time raising our baby.
Tommorow, I don't have no plan after work.
>>> Tomorrow, I don't have plans after work.
I must come back home early, Maybe before 7pm, and I think It would better that I will have dinner with her together.
>>> I must go home early, maybe around 7 p.m., and I think it would be better to have dinner with her.
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