I'm home

2011-06-23 · 첨삭 강사 Joey

학생이 쓴 원문

When I came home over midnight, my wife and baby fell asleep deeply. They didn't know that I came back home. Today, I had an appointment with my client at the dinner. Although I had come home late two days straight, I had to go there because the client is very important for my company. We had a lot of beverageTonight, so I'm dizzy now. I don't like that meeting but I have to do. As I'm promoted in my company, I have more responsibility for relationship with my client. It makes me tired. And I always feel sorry for my wife, who have been struggling to grow our baby. Tommorow, I don't have no plan after work. I must come back home early, Maybe before 7pm, and I think It would better that I will have dinner with her together.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!   I'm happy that you don't need to go home late tonight!  Like I suggested earlier, buy your wife something nice tonight, surprise her! buy her favorite cake or chocolate or somethingyou know she likes. Just a simple thought for her before you guys eat dinner tonight!   You are such a sweet husband, [이름]. ^^   Here are my corrections:   When I came home over midnight, my wife and baby fell asleep deeply. >>> When I went home past midnight last night, I found my wife and baby ast asleep. They didn't know that I came back home. >>>Correct.  Today, I had an appointment with my client at the dinner. >>> I had a dinner meeting with a client today. Although I had come home late two days straight, I had to go there because the client is very important for my company. >>> Although I went home late for two days straight, I still attended this meeting because this client is very important to my company. We had a lot of beverageTonight, so I'm dizzy now. >>> We drank a lot that's why I'm dizzy now. I don't like that meeting but I have to do. >>> I don't like to attend to that meeting but I have no choice.  As I'm promoted in my company, I have more responsibility for relationship with my client. >>> As being promoted in my company, I have more responsibility like building rapport with the clients.  It makes me tired. >>> It makes me feel tired.  And I always feel sorry for my wife, who have been struggling to grow our baby. >>> And I feel sorry for my wife who is having a hard time raising our baby. Tommorow, I don't have no plan after work. >>> Tomorrow, I don't have plans after work. I must come back home early, Maybe before 7pm, and I think It would better that I will have dinner with her together. >>> I must go home early, maybe around 7 p.m., and I think it would be better to have dinner with her.  

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·