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2013-04-22 · 첨삭 강사 Aimee

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AS = Australia I think my plan that go to AS for working holiday will put off for a while. There is no saying how many days I have to put off my plan. To go working holiday in AS, Every one who wants to go AS must go through some inspection, such as physical examination and a crime record and so on.. We must get a physical examination in hospital that was appointed by national and if we go thought that without any problem such as tuberculosis, they're gonna send the form that're prove our health to department of immigration of AS. And then, The doctors who are Australian are gonna inspect our form one more time, then if we go through again, finally we'll be get a Working visa from the place Though it sounds very hard and complicated, actually it doesn't like that. In Korea, AS is the easiest country to get working visa among the other country.

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Hi there Aaron! Happy Monday! Awww, why do you need to postpone your plans? Anyways, tell me about it later. I hope that everything goes well for you though. I think Australia is a great country and going there to work would be very beneficial to you. Have a great day and I will see you later!   ~T. Aimee^^   AS = Australia >>Correct!I think my plan that go to AS for working holiday will put off for a while. >> I think my plan to go to AS for the holidays to work will be put off for a while.There is no saying how many days I have to put off my plan.>> I am not sure on how many days I have to put off my plans.To go working holiday in AS, >>Going to AS for work is very hard. Every one who wants to go AS must go through some inspection, such as physical examination and a crime record and so on.. >> Anybody who wants to go to AS must go through some inspection, such as physical examination, background check and so on.We must get a physical examination in hospital that was appointed by national >> We must go to the hospital that was appointed by the agency to have the physical examination.  and if we go thought that without any problem such as tuberculosis,they\'re gonna send the form that\'re prove our health to department of immigration of AS. >> If we go through that without any problems like having Tuberculosis, they are going to send the results to the immigration department in AS for approval.And then, The doctors who are Australian are gonna inspect our form one more time, then if we go through again, finally we\'ll be get a Working visa from the place >>After that, The doctors who are in Australia are going to check your form for the second time and if you pass, you will be granted a Working visa.Though it sounds very hard and complicated, >> Even if it sounds very hard and complicated, actually it doesn\'t like that. >> it actually doesn\'t look like that.In Korea, AS is the easiest country to get working visa among the other country. >> In Korea, AS is the country where you can get a working visa the easiest.  

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