I\'m sorry teacher but please correct as soon as posible
학생이 쓴 원문
Adults say adolescents are addicted to smartphone.
I think I am one of those people.
I am obsessed with checking my phone waiting for a notification to arrive, even if it doesn\'t come.
I play mobile games, upload pictures on Instagram, text others on social media.
Mobile phone addiction has been disrupting my daily life and has a negative impact on learning, and relationship.
I should solve this problem for my healthy life.
Here are some ways I can build better digital habits.
First, I will turn off as many push notifications as possible.
Then I won’t be disturbed by a message that latest Instagram photo or Twitter post has been uploaded.
Second, I will put my phone as far away from my bed as possible before going to bed.
Then I can take away the thought that I\'m going to watch social media for a little bit before bed.
It’s not easy to build good digital habits, but I’ll do my best until being free from smartphone.
강사 첨삭
Hi Paul!
Here\'s the correction.
Teacher Andrea
>> Correct
I think I am one of those people.
>> I think I am one of them.
I am obsessed with checking my phone waiting for a notification to arrive, even if it doesn\'t come.
>> I am obsessed checking my phone, waiting for a notification to arrive even if it doesn\'t\' come.
I play mobile games, upload pictures on Instagram, text others on social media.
>> I play mobile games, upload pictures on Instagram, and send messages on social media.
Mobile phone addiction has been disrupting my daily life and has a negative impact on learning, and relationship.
>> Mobile phone addiction has been disrupting my daily life and has a negative impact on learning and relationship.
I should solve this problem for my healthy life.
>> I should solve this problem for me to have a healthy lifestyle.
Here are some ways I can build better digital habits.
>> Correct
First, I will turn off as many push notifications as possible.
>> Correct
Then I won’t be disturbed by a message that latest Instagram photo or Twitter post has been uploaded.
>> Then I won’t be disturbed by a message about the latest Instagram photo or Twitter post that has been uploaded.
Second, I will put my phone as far away from my bed as possible before going to bed.
>> Second, I will put my phone as far as possible before going to bed.
Then I can take away the thought that I\'m going to watch social media for a little bit before bed.
>> Then I can take away the thought of checking social media for a little bit before bed time.
It’s not easy to build good digital habits, but I’ll do my best until being free from smartphone.
>> Correct
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