I made a sentence aboutr my weakness using that words

2019-04-18 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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>> What do yo consider to be your weakness? I was a vice chairman of graduation exhibition preparation committee. we don’t have much time to prepare exhibition, I used to go about things like a dictator sometimes without listening to other people\'s opinions. (that is my weakness : lack of leadership or listening) But l felt that leader needed to have the ability to discern and analyze the whole thing, not just in areas he could do well. (I think I need to make up for my weakness.) I suggested that each graduate write down all of his ideas on the blackboard, and then combine them with similar or complementary ideas to correct this situation as a facilitator. so that we could see them come together one by one and complete them in a single, big picture. (how to improve the leadership that is lacking.) This method facilitate to bring people\'s opinions together and promoted them to be free to express their opinions. (or promoted me to listen other opinions.)

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Cheers!

Jean~~


>> What do yo consider to be your weakness?
I was a vice chairman of graduation exhibition preparation committee.

>>  I was the vice-chairman of our graduation exhibition preparation committee.


we don’t have much time to prepare exhibition, I used to go about things like a dictator sometimes without listening to other people\'s opinions. (that is my weakness : lack of leadership or listening) But l felt that leader needed to have the ability to discern and analyze the whole thing, not just in areas he could do well. (I think I need to make up for my weakness.)

>> We didn\'t have much time to prepare for the exhibition that\'s why I was too impatient and acted like a dictator as I sometimes made decisions without listening to other people\'s opinions. But I felt that a leader needed to have the ability to discern and analyze the whole thing, not just in areas he could do well.


I suggested that each graduate write down all of his ideas on the blackboard, and then combine them with similar or complementary ideas to correct this situation as a facilitator. 

>> I therefore suggested that each graduate write down all of his/her ideas on the blackboard, and then combined them with similar or complementary ideas.


 so that we could see them come together one by one and complete them in a single, big picture. (how to improve the leadership that is lacking.)

>> As a result, we could see our ideas come together one by one and put them together into a single, big picture. I facilitated the entire process. 


This method facilitate to bring people\'s opinions together and promoted them to be free to express their opinions. (or promoted me to listen other opinions.)

>> Facilitation helps bring people\'s opinions together and encourage them to freely express their ideas.

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