I made a sentence aboutr my weakness using that words
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>> What do yo consider to be your weakness?
I was a vice chairman of graduation exhibition preparation committee.
>> I was the vice-chairman of our graduation exhibition preparation committee.
we don’t have much time to prepare exhibition, I used to go about things like a dictator sometimes without listening to other people\'s opinions. (that is my weakness : lack of leadership or listening) But l felt that leader needed to have the ability to discern and analyze the whole thing, not just in areas he could do well. (I think I need to make up for my weakness.)
>> We didn\'t have much time to prepare for the exhibition that\'s why I was too impatient and acted like a dictator as I sometimes made decisions without listening to other people\'s opinions. But I felt that a leader needed to have the ability to discern and analyze the whole thing, not just in areas he could do well.
I suggested that each graduate write down all of his ideas on the blackboard, and then combine them with similar or complementary ideas to correct this situation as a facilitator.
>> I therefore suggested that each graduate write down all of his/her ideas on the blackboard, and then combined them with similar or complementary ideas.
so that we could see them come together one by one and complete them in a single, big picture. (how to improve the leadership that is lacking.)
>> As a result, we could see our ideas come together one by one and put them together into a single, big picture. I facilitated the entire process.
This method facilitate to bring people\'s opinions together and promoted them to be free to express their opinions. (or promoted me to listen other opinions.)
>> Facilitation helps bring people\'s opinions together and encourage them to freely express their ideas.
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