I made my own template for speaking, plz proofread them.
학생이 쓴 원문
When I was 16, back in high school, I was a narrow-minded kid. I was selfish, egoistic, and aggressive. All the negative adjectives could be attached. What I was too stupid to understand was that I could be in the doghouse because of my personality. Later I heard what I suffered was a natural phenomenon for children from underprivileged family backgrounds and passing the stormy period of adolescence, I brought my A game to improve my personality. And I feel like I’m a totally different person now. You know, more Altruistic,
I don’t wanna put my reputation on the line. I’m quite strict about a moral problem. Even though there would be no punitive action or it’s just a misdemeanor, I don’t prefer crossing my own line. I abhor violating moral codes.
강사 첨삭
Hi Louie!
As I said before, keep your sentences short and simple.
Many of your vocabulary words are correct but not commonly used.
Do a research for the most commonly used terms and expressions.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
When I was 16, back in high school, I was a narrow-minded kid.
>> Correct
I was selfish, egoistic, and aggressive.
>> Correct
All the negative adjectives could be attached.
>> I was associated with all negative descriptions.
What I was too stupid to understand was that I could be in the doghouse because of my personality.
>> Correct
Later I heard what I suffered was a natural phenomenon for children from underprivileged family backgrounds.
>> Correct
and passing the stormy period of adolescence, I brought my A game to improve my personality.
>> Passing the stormy period of adolescence, I brought my A game to improve my personality.
And I feel like I’m a totally different person now.
>> I feel like I’m a totally different person now.
You know, more Altruistic,
>> I feel like I\'m more altruistic.
I don’t wanna put my reputation on the line.
I don’t wanna put my reputation on the line.
>> I don’t want to put my reputation on the line.
I’m quite strict about a moral problem.
>> I’m quite strict about any moral problem.
Even though there would be no punitive action or it’s just a misdemeanor, I don’t prefer crossing my own line.
>> Even though there would be no punitive action or it’s just a misdemeanor, I don’t prefer crossing the line I set for myself.
I abhor violating moral codes.
>> Correct
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