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Back in Germany, when i was an exchange student in Frankfurt University of Applied science, one day i planned to travel New York City with one of my best friends. That was because of the affordable flying ticket price from Germany to New York. anyway, when i reached New York city, the first thing i did was visiting Times Square. The first moment is still fresh in my memory. Brightly lit by numerous billboards and advertisements, Times square was there. I felt like i had an emotional epiphany. i mean, figure of speech.located at the junction of Broadway and Seventh Avenue, Times Square is a major commercial intersection, tourist destination, and entertainment center one of the world\'s busiest pedestrian areas.
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~~ Teacher Sharon
Back in Germany, when i was an exchange student in Frankfurt University of Applied science, one day i planned to travel New York City with one of my best friends.
>> Back in Germany, when I was an exchange student in Frankfurt University of Applied science, I had plans to travel to New York City with one of my best friends.
That was because of the affordable flying ticket price from Germany to New York.
>> That was because of the affordable plane tickets from Germany to New York.
anyway, when i reached New York city, the first thing i did was visiting Times Square.
>> Anyway, when I reached New York City, the first thing I did was to visit Times Square.
The first moment is still fresh in my memory.
>> Correct
Brightly lit by numerous billboards and advertisements, Times square was there.
>> Brightly lit with numerous billboards and advertisements, Times square was there.
I felt like i had an emotional epiphany.
>> I felt like I had an emotional epiphany.
i mean, figure of speech.
>> This is figuratively speaking.
located at the junction of Broadway and Seventh Avenue, Times Square is a major commercial intersection, tourist destination, and entertainment center one of the world\'s busiest pedestrian areas.
>> Located at the junction of Broadway and Seventh Avenue, Times Square is a major commercial intersection, tourist destination, and entertainment center and one of the world\'s busiest pedestrian areas.
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