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First of all, taxes are crucial revenue for running schools, hospitals and other public facilities. Without taxes, those facilities lose its foundation and fail to maintain its services for the public. According to the research conducted by Seoul National University, more than two third of medical and educational facilities in Korea rely on 80 percent of taxes paid by local citizens. It is clear that taxes are the most fundamental resources of public facilities. As citizens are users of public facilities, they should pay taxes as a member of local citizens. Without citizen’s concerns toward needs of taxes, public services would easily stopped. On top of that, paying taxes is important because it decreases gap between the wealth and the poor. In contemporary society, taxes have been used for helping people with less income, which eliminates economical gap among people.If the wealth denied paying taxes, there might be riots or dissatisfaction with society aroused by the people with financial problems.

Hello [이름]!Good afternoon! How are you doing now? I hope things are fine today. Anyway, thank  you for sending this composition. Great job this day. You\'re really good at expressing yourself. You have a lot of opinions to share which makes you a good speak. However, I want you to be always alert of the grammar rules. Please study the proper use of prepositions, articles, and verb tenses. Know when to use the plural and singular forms of words also. Furthermore, you did things well today. Keep up the good work and see you next week! Have a safe trip [이름]! Enjoy the weekend as well! ~~ T. Abby ~~ First of all, taxes are crucial revenue for running schools, hospitals and other public facilities. >> First of all, tax is a crucial revenue for running schools, hospitals and other public facilities.Without taxes, those facilities lose its foundation and fail to maintain its services for the public. >> Without taxes, those facilities would lose its foundation and fail to maintain the services given to the public. OR> Without tax, facilities as mentioned would likely lose its foundation as well as fail to maintain the services served for the public.According to the research conducted by Seoul National University, more than two third of medical and educational facilities in Korea rely on 80 percent of taxes paid by local citizens. >> According to the research conducted by Seoul National University, more than two thirds of the medical and educational facilities in Korea rely on the 80 percent total of taxes paid by the local citizens.It is clear that taxes are the most fundamental resources of public facilities. >> It is clear that tax is the most fundamental resource of our public facilities. OR> It\'s clear that taxes are the most fundamental resource of our public facilities.As citizens are users of public facilities, they should pay taxes as a member of local citizens. >> As citizens who use these public facilities, we should pay our taxes as members of the country. OR> As local citizens who use these public facilities, we should be responsible enough to pay our taxes.Without citizen’s concerns toward needs of taxes, public services would easily stopped. >> Without the citizens\' concern about taxes, public services would easily stop. OR> Without the citizens\' responsibility for paying taxes, public services would cease.On top of that, paying taxes is important because it decreases gap between the wealth and the poor. >> On top of that, paying taxes is important because it decreases the gap between the wealthy and the poor.In contemporary society, taxes have been used for helping people with less income, which eliminates economical gap among people. >> In a contemporary society, taxes have been used for helping people with less income, which eliminates economical gap.If the wealth denied paying taxes, there might be riots or dissatisfaction with society aroused by the people with financial problems. >> If the wealthy denies paying tax, there might be riots or dissatisfaction in the society which can arise people\'s financial problem. OR> If wealthy people deny to pay their taxes, poor people might be dissatisfied in the society which would lead them to start a riot.