I need corrections on the following sentences.

2014-01-23 · 첨삭 강사 abby

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I overslept this morning. See you tomorrow! I’ d like to continue my artwork as examining poetry qualities of randomness and paradox in humdrum incidents of daily life. First of all, opportunities of participating public exhibitions and art projects will provide me chances to actively engage in contemporary art scene in Glasgow. In addition, through seminars and group discussions I will develop my ability to share, compare and contrast my thoughts with others, which will enable me to logically express ideas and processes involved in my artistic practice. Particularly, I am interested to make distinctive visual language of digital media. I expect that workshops related to learning media technologies will help me to produce images that I want with proper technics.

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Hi there [이름]!Thank you for sending this message. I was just a bit worried this morning that you weren\'t online. Anyhow, it was already in my thought that you might still be sleeping or something came up so you went somewhere. It\'s good to know that you had a good sleep. Moreover, great job in this composition though you have to be mindful of the proper usage of words as well as grammar. Please check the corrections written below as well. I\'ll see you then tomorrow and keep safe! Have a great afternoon! ~~ T. Abby ~~ I overslept this morning. >> Correct!See you tomorrow! >> Correct!I’ d like to continue my artwork as examining poetry qualities of randomness and paradox in humdrum incidents of daily life. >> I\'d like to continue my artwork by examining  the poetry qualities of randomness and the paradox in the humdrum incidents of a person\'s daily life.First of all, opportunities of participating public exhibitions and art projects will provide me chances to actively engage in contemporary art scene in Glasgow. >> First of all, the opportunity to participate in public exhibitions and art projects can provide me the chance to actively engage myself in contemporary art scenes in Glasgow.In addition, through seminars and group discussions I will develop my ability to share, compare and contrast my thoughts with others, which will enable me to logically express ideas and processes involved in my artistic practice. >> In addition, through seminars and group discussions, I can develop my abilities to share, compare and contrast my thoughts with others which will enable me to logically express my ideas easily and this processes are involved in my artistic practice.Particularly, I am interested to make distinctive visual language of digital media. >> I am particularly interested to make distinctive visual language of digital media.I expect that workshops related to learning media technologies will help me to produce images that I want with proper technics.  >> I expect that workshops related to learning media technologies will help me produce images that I want with proper techniques.

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