I play instruent when I am in my house.
학생이 쓴 원문
Among the activities I do at home, the most and my favorite activity is playing an instrument. The instruments I can play include cello, piano, drums, and flute. My mother was a pianist, so , I played the piano the best among my friends, and I went to the piano contest and won many awards, but it was so hard because I scold to my mom, because of piano, so I just get out of piano and I have new interest in cello. Also I am currently active in the cello orchestra team. I can only play the flute simply, and I learn a little drum at academy, quit because of corona, and I am making a new technique myself.
P.S. The picture is about my piano contest, the third prize
강사 첨삭
Good evening Maria!
There is never a dull moment there at your home because your talent keeps it busy and musical. It is my dream to play a musical instrument so well. However, I quit piano when I was on Grade 2. Today, I can only sing and that is how I keep my passion for music.
It is wonderful to have those talents to play musical instruments as yours. It keeps your mind active and your skills better through time. I hope to hear a piano or a cello piece from you soon. ^^
Thank you and see you again!
-T. Donna =)
>> Correct!
P.S. The picture is about my piano contest, the third prize
The instruments I can play include cello, piano, drums, and flute.
>> Correct!
My mother was a pianist, so , I played the piano the best among my friends, and I went to the piano contest and won many awards, but it was so hard because I scold to my mom, because of piano, so I just get out of piano and I have new interest in cello.
>> My mother was a pianist, so , I played the piano the best among my friends, and I went to the piano contest and won many awards. But it was so hard because I get scolded by my mom because of playing the piano, so I just got out of piano and I have a new interest in cello.
Also I am currently active in the cello orchestra team.
>> Correct!
I can only play the flute simply, and I learn a little drum at academy, quit because of corona, and I am making a new technique myself.
>> I can only play the flute simply, and I learned a little drums at the academy, quit because of Corona, and I am making a new technique myself.
P.S. The picture is about my piano contest, the third prize
>> Correct!
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