I prefer mountains to beaches
학생이 쓴 원문
I like mountains better than beaches. On mountains I can see many beautiful trees and flowers. Also I can see the clean water from the nice falls or valleys. On top of that , there are some cute animals like squirrels and birds. First of all I love fresh air most. I like climbing mountains enjoying cool and fresh air.
강사 첨삭
Happy Friday, Gi [이름]!
Thank you for your efforts! :)
Your writing made me imagine the beautiful mountains. ^^
Have a wonderful weekend! See you on Tuesday!
Your writing made me imagine the beautiful mountains. ^^
Have a wonderful weekend! See you on Tuesday!
-T.Jhozel
I like mountains better than beaches.
>> Correct!
OR: Mountains are more appealing to me than beaches.
OR: Mountains are more appealing to me than beaches.
On mountains I can see many beautiful trees and flowers.
>> Correct!
Also I can see the clean water from the nice falls or valleys.
>> Correct!
OR: I can also see the clear water from the beautiful falls or valleys.
OR: I can also see the clear water from the beautiful falls or valleys.
On top of that , there are some cute animals like squirrels and birds.
>> Correct!
OR: There are also some adorable animals such as squirrels and birds.
OR: There are also some adorable animals such as squirrels and birds.
First of all I love fresh air most.
>> Correct!
I like climbing mountains enjoying cool and fresh air.
>> Correct!
OR: I enjoy climbing mountains and breathing in the fresh air.
OR: I enjoy climbing mountains and breathing in the fresh air.
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