I prefer to live life at a slower pace.
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ESSAY: Some people are always in a hurry to go places and get things done. Other people prefer to take their time and live life at a slower pace. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I prefer to live life at a slower pace.
Firstly, sometimes I need more time than other people to decide something. I believe that if you need to decide something to important you should spend much time to think about it very carefully. But if you are in hurry to decide something important it should have a mistake of something important.
Secondly, If you are always in a hurry, it is hard to make a life and work balance. I think that most of the people who are in a hurry is focusing on work not life. Because they should work done in a hurry so they don\'t have enough time to enjoy their life. But if you select to live life at a slower pace you have more time to enjoy your life.
Those two reasons are why I prefer to live life at a slower pace.
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Good morning Sir JY~! ^^ Thank you for always doing your homework diligently~!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I prefer to live life at a slower pace.
>>> CORRECT
Firstly, sometimes I need more time than other people to decide something.
Firstly, sometimes I need more time than other people to decide something.
>>> Firstly, sometimes I need more time to decide for something compared to other people.
I believe that if you need to decide something to important you should spend much time to think about it very carefully.
>>> I believe that if you need to decide for something important you should spend much time to think about it very carefully.
But if you are in hurry to decide something important it should have a mistake of something important.
>>> But if you are in a hurry to decide for something important you might commit a mistake.
Secondly, If you are always in a hurry, it is hard to make a life and work balance.
Secondly, If you are always in a hurry, it is hard to make a life and work balance.
>>> Secondly, if you are always in a hurry, it is hard to make life and work in balance.
I think that most of the people who are in a hurry is focusing on work not life.
>>> CORRECT
Because they should work done in a hurry so they don\'t have enough time to enjoy their life.
>>> Because they should work in a hurry so they don\'t have enough time to enjoy their life.
But if you select to live life at a slower pace you have more time to enjoy your life.
>>> CORRECT
Those two reasons are why I prefer to live life at a slower pace.
Those two reasons are why I prefer to live life at a slower pace.
>>> Those are the two reasons why I prefer to live life at a slower pace.
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