I spend my weekend doing homework then just relax at home.

2018-05-16 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

학생이 쓴 원문

Weekend is really a great present to me ... In this time, I really take a lot of relax and relief. Sometimes, old days than now, I used to utilize that time for my fun. But nowadays, I am busy like as there is no time for using. And On Sunday, I always go to the church for my body and soul. My mother always say that you have to worship god so as to receive virtue. Thanks a lot for reading. Bye.

강사 첨삭

Hello again, Mr. [이름]!~~


Doing your homework regularly is admirable.


Cheers! Jean^^




Weekend is really a great present to me ...

>> The weekend was a great present to me.


 In this time, I really take a lot of relax and relief.

>> During this time, I take plenty of rest and do relaxing activities to relieve my stress.


 Sometimes, old days than now, I used to utilize that time for my fun.

>> In my younger days, I used to utilize the weekends for fun.

>> OR: When I was younger, I used to have fun on weekends.


 But nowadays, I am busy like as there is no time for using.

>> But nowadays, I am too busy living my life that I don\'t have enough time for that kind of fun.


 And On Sunday, I always go to the church for my body and soul.

>> On Sundays, I always go to church for my spiritual health.


 My mother always say that you have to worship god so as to receive virtue.

>> My mother always say that you have to worship god so as to become virtuous.


 Thanks a lot for reading. Bye.

>> CORRECT

>> OR: I appreciate your reading my composition. Cheers!

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