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2013-08-02 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

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I went to 1)_the airport at 6:00 AM yesterday. I had to catch 2)_a flight to Paris. The lines at 3)_the airport were very long, so I had to wait 4)a long time. Once 5)_the plane took off, I tried to get some sleep but I couldn't. Then I ate 6)a pretty good meal, 7)a rare occurrence on airplanes! Later, I spoke to one of 8)__the__ flight attendants for 9)a_ while. She was pretty. She told me that 10)_the_ pilot of 11)_the airplane was French. I managed to fall asleep for about 12)an_ hour. After I woke up, I felt refreshed. I ordered 13)__a__ drink, then another. Generally, it was 14)a_ pretty smooth flight. In the night, I was resting on my couch. Suddenly my phone rang. I answered my call which was called by my friend. When I was in high school, I met them there. We talked about my past days and enjoyed our time. l came back my home at 01:30 A.M

강사 첨삭

Hello there,

Very good! You got a perfect score!!! 

I do know that you have a big chance of improving your skills in English.

I do appreciate your effort in writing an essay because this could really enhance your skill.

T. Nina^^

 I went to 1)_the airport at 6:00 AM yesterday.I had to catch

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2)_a flight to Paris. 

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The lines at 3)_the airport were very long, so I had to wait

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4)a long time.Once

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5)_the plane took off, I tried to get some sleep but I couldn\'t.

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Then I ate 6)a pretty good meal,

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7)a rare occurrence on airplanes! Later, I spoke to one of

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8)__the__ flight attendants for

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9)a_ while. She was pretty. She told me that

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10)_the_ pilot of

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11)_the airplane was French. I managed to fall asleep for about

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12)an_ hour. After I woke up, I felt refreshed. I ordered

>>correct

13)__a__ drink, then another. Generally, it was

>>correct

14)a_ pretty smooth flight.

>>correct

 In the night, I was resting on my couch.

>>I was resting then on my couch last night.

Suddenly my phone rang.

>>Suddenly, my phone rang.

I answered my call which was called by my friend.

>>My friend called me.

>>I answered my friend\'s call.

When I was in high school, I met them there.

>>I met him when I was in high school and I went out to see him.

We talked about my past days and enjoyed our time.

>>We enjoyed talking about our past experiences.

l came back my home at 01:30 A.M

>>I went back home at 1:30 A.M.^^

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