I think,,,
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I think the most Important vitamin in the future is maybe the Vitimin D.
For me, I'm working in the place where sunlight doesn't came.
So I need to go outside of my office whenever I want to see the sunlight.
Vitamin D is the special vitamin which is made in our body.
Specially when we are keep touching with sunlight, it can be made.
So I think in the future, many people working in there office and
Probably, the atmosphere contamination will be more accelated than now.
I expect that many people should keep their mask on their face.
and smoke and fog(smog) will be thicker than now so, sunlight can't through the work place.
That is the reason why I think Vitamin D is the most important vitamin in the future.
You know,,,, may we can buy it in the future.
Probably, It is the matter which we have to wait and see it.
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Good day [이름]. ^^
Thanks for sharing your ideas about this topic.
I think you are right. With the advancing technology, Vitamin might be already available as pills in the future.
We should always find time to go out and receive good sunlight.
It is always good to go out around seven to eight o\'clock in the morning.
Have a great day.
Teacher Nina
>> I think the most important vitamin in the future is Vitamin D.
For me, I\'m working in the place where sunlight doesn\'t came.
For me, I\'m working in the place where sunlight doesn\'t came.
>> In my case, I am working in a place where sunlight doesn\'t come in.
>> OR: In my case, I am working in a place where the rays of the sun can\'t be felt.
So I need to go outside of my office whenever I want to see the sunlight.
So I need to go outside of my office whenever I want to see the sunlight.
>> Correct
Vitamin D is the special vitamin which is made in our body.
Vitamin D is the special vitamin which is made in our body.
>> Correct
>> Did you mean: Vitamin D is needed and made for our body.
Specially when we are keep touching with sunlight, it can be made.
Specially when we are keep touching with sunlight, it can be made.
>> Did you mean: Especially when we are exposed to sun, it will be produced.
So I think in the future, many people working in there office and Probably, the atmosphere contamination will be more accelated than now.
So I think in the future, many people working in there office and Probably, the atmosphere contamination will be more accelated than now.
>> Did you mean: So, I think in the future, cross contamination will be higher that will lead to diseases in the office. ( Please explain this sentence in class. ^^ )
I expect that many people should keep their mask on their face.
I expect that many people should keep their mask on their face.
>> I expect that many people should wear masks.
and smoke and fog(smog) will be thicker than now so, sunlight can\'t through the work place.
>> Did you mean: Smoke and smog will increase, so the sunlight can\'t pass through the work place.
and smoke and fog(smog) will be thicker than now so, sunlight can\'t through the work place.
>> Did you mean: Smoke and smog will increase, so the sunlight can\'t pass through the work place.
That is the reason why I think Vitamin D is the most important vitamin in the future.
>> Correct
You know,,,, may we can buy it in the future.
You know,,,, may we can buy it in the future.
>> You know what, maybe we can buy it in the future.
Probably, It is the matter which we have to wait and see it.
Probably, It is the matter which we have to wait and see it.
>> Probably, it is what we should wait and see.
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