I think.
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to break down two situations depanding on their relationship between them.
Before being a boy friend, men often talk more than women. because man want to make woman his own girl. so he want to show his strong point and want to be seen more attractive. they want to express their interest to her. this phenomenon is shown in Italy dominantly. You know that many Italy men are loved by women because of their attitude to talk with women.
However, After being a boy friend of her, women tend to more talkative than men.
they want to talk about their life and want men to understand their situations.
In fact, boy friend becomes a counseller.
Of course, In my case, Carolyn always talk about her daily life to me.
but that doesn't mean that I don't want to listen her life.
I think she throw her stress through talking with me, which is all I can do.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
How are you?
Are you having fun this weekend?
Are you having fun this weekend?
I am soooo excited to hear your stories. Hihihihi.
You are right, women love talking.
It is important for us to know that there is someone who will always listen to us.
I admire you for that. Talk to you soon.
Teacher Nina
>> I want to breakdown two situations depending on their relationship between them.
Before being a boy friend, men often talk more than women.
>> Before being a boyfriend, men often talk more than women.
because man want to make woman his own girl.
>> Because man wants to make a woman his own.
>> OR: Because a man wants to make a woman his own girl.
so he want to show his strong point and want to be seen more attractive.
>> So he wants to show his strong point and wants to be seen more attractive.
>> OR: So, he wants to show his strengths and to be seen more attractive.
they want to express their interest to her.
>> correct
this phenomenon is shown in Italy dominantly.
>> correct
>> OR: This situation is seen in Italy.
You know that many Italy men are loved by women because of their attitude to talk with women.
>> You know that many men Italians are loved by women because of their attitude in communicating with women.
However, After being a boy friend of her, women tend to more talkative than men.
>> However, after being a boyfriend, women tend to be more talkative than men.
they want to talk about their life and want men to understand their situations.
they want to talk about their life and want men to understand their situations.
>> correct
In fact, boy friend becomes a counseller.
>> In fact, a boyfriend becomes a counselor.
In fact, boy friend becomes a counseller.
>> In fact, a boyfriend becomes a counselor.
Of course, In my case, Carolyn always talk about her daily life to me.
>> Of course, in my case, Carolyn always talks about her daily activities.
>> OR: Of course, in my case, Carolyn always share stories about her daily activities.
but that doesn\'t mean that I don\'t want to listen her life.
>> OR: Of course, in my case, Carolyn always share stories about her daily activities.
but that doesn\'t mean that I don\'t want to listen her life.
>> But that doesn\'t mean that I don\'t want to listen to her stories.
I think she throw her stress through talking with me, which is all I can do.
I think she throw her stress through talking with me, which is all I can do.
>> I think she relieves her stress by talking to me, it is the only thing I can do.
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