I think beauty is not the same for every person.

2020-10-05 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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Do I think beauty is the same for every person? The answer is No. of course. when I was young, I thought the beauty is the same for every person. Big eyes, high nose, big mouse and egg shape face. but, now I know that was wrong. I think every person has own beauty. a person, who has square face like as a Angelina Jolie. a person, who has beautiful mind so, she or he has beautiful pupil. like those things, every person who has special charming point. So, I think beauty is not the same for every person. and one more thing I should tell you. these days, many women have plastic surgery. they loose their own beauty. so I feel very sorry about that. when I go to gang-nam , I can see the people who has same face as all. that is so weird .... we should keep our own special beauty:)

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]-Ri!
Thank you for writing this beautiful essay. I agree that we should keep our natural beauty intact because we are all beautiful in our own way.
It\'s just a matter of accepting what we have and always seeing it as beautiful. The problem is the double standards that societies most of the time have.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great. See you in class later my dear. ^_^
~Charry

Do I think beauty is the same for every person?
>> CORRECT!
The answer is No. of course.
>> The answer is no, of course.
when I was young, I thought the beauty is the same for every person.
>> When I was young, I thought beauty is the same for every person.
Big eyes, high nose, big mouse and egg shape face.
>> I thought big eyes, high nose, full lips and an egg shaped face are the standards of beauty.
but, now I know that was wrong.
>> But now I know that was wrong.
I think every person has own beauty.
>> I think every person is beautiful.
a person, who has square face like as a Angelina Jolie.
>> A person who has a square face like Angelina Jolie is beautiful.
a person, who has beautiful mind so, she or he has beautiful pupil.
>> A person who has a beautiful mind or has beautiful pupils is beautiful.
like those things, every person who has special charming point.
>> Those are some examples. Every person has a special charming point.
So, I think beauty is not the same for every person.
>> CORRECT!
and one more thing I should tell you.
>> There\'s one more thing that I should tell you.
these days, many women have plastic surgery.
>> These days, many women are having plastic surgeries.
they loose their own beauty. so I feel very sorry about that.
>> They lose their own beauty. So, I feel very sorry about that.
when I go to gang-nam , I can see the people who has same face as all.
>> When I go to Gang-nam, I can see people who have similar facial features.
that is so weird ....
>> That is so weird.
we should keep our own special beauty:)
>> We should keep our own special beauty:)

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