I think close relationship with their pets is good for person.
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ESSAY: Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I think close relationship with their pets is good for person. You know that nowadays many people feel lonely in many times. For such kinds of persons who feel lonely pets are very good to take care of their mind. And for children they can learn worthy of human\'s life and animal, and some cases they can learn society relation from taking care of their pets. Those two reasons are why I agree with close relationship with their pets is good.
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Good day Sir JY~! I think you\'re not so busy because you made your homework in a row. Thanks for spending time making it.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think close relationship with their pets is good for person.
>>> I think having a close relationship with pets is good for people.
You know that nowadays many people feel lonely in many times.
>>> Nowadays, there are many people who feel lonely most of the time.
For such kinds of persons who feel lonely pets are very good to take care of their mind.
>>> To those people who feel lonely, pets are very good to take care of their mind.
And for children they can learn worthy of human\'s life and animal, and some cases they can learn society relation from taking care of their pets.
>>> For children they can learn worthy of human\'s life and animals, and in some cases they can learn society relationships from taking care of their pets.
Those two reasons are why I agree with close relationship with their pets is good.
>>> Those are the reasons why I agree close relationship with pets is good.
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