I think family is more important than friends

2014-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 Reina

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I think happy life is made up with love. We can share love with all the people surrounding us, such as family members and friends. So I think not only love between family members but also friendship is important to make happy life. I got losted my mother several years ago from disease, and I realized the importance of family again. I think only who have the experience of family member's death can know about the feeling.

강사 첨삭

Wow [이름]! Very well said. I think that your experiences has made you to a good family man that you are right now. Family is indeed very important and that we have to prioritize them before others. But like you said friends are also important because we have to deal with other people everyday. I\'m sorry to hear about your mom. Thank you for sharing you opinion. Teacher Reina *.* I think happy life is made up with love. >> I think that a happy life is made up of love.  We can share love with all the people surrounding us, such as family members and friends.>>correctSo I think not only love between family members but also friendship is important to make happy life.>> So, I  think not only love between family members but friendship is also important to make a happy life. >> OR BETTER: But I also think that friendship is important to make a happy life not only love between family members.  I got losted my mother several years ago from disease, and I realized the importance of family again. >> I lost my mother several years ago from a disease and I realized the importance of family again.  I think only who have the experience of family member\'s death can know about the feeling. >> I think that only those who have an experience of family member\'s death knows about the feeling.

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