I think how can I help to my society
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi Da [이름],
You can learn a lot about how the world works by immersing yourself in a community and being surrounded by people who are committed to making the world a better place. Serving others gives you a unique sense of purpose that often shows up in other areas of your life.
~Teacher Cathy
I think my country is developed by people because they make grow a country.
>> I think my country is made by people because they help grow a country.
so when I try harder and increase my value
>> So, I try harder and increase my value.
because I think the way to develop the country is grow myself.
>> Because I believe the way I can help develop the country is to grow myself.
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