I think powerful punishment is needed to prevent bullying.
학생이 쓴 원문
ESSAY: Is there a way to punish school bullying effectively? How?
It is very difficult to find out effective way how we punish a student who is bullying someone.
I would like to just write down my opinion about that.
I think we can give penalty them who are bullying someone. The penalty can be effective whenever their life.
For example if you were bullying someone in elementary school, you have a minus point to enter middle school, high school, university and to get a job.
And we can give high fine to their parents. It can makes parents perform education to their children do not bullying someone.
I think that bullying is really bad things. It can make someone\'s life really really not good. So I think powerful punishment is needed to prevent bullying.
강사 첨삭
Good day Sir JY! ^^ Are you having a hard time with your essay these days? kkkk Well, I think you have commendable ideas. Keep it up! See you! ^^ Enjoy your night!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
It is very difficult to find out effective way how we punish a student who is bullying someone.
>>> It is very difficult to find out effective ways to punish a student who is bullying someone.
I would like to just write down my opinion about that.
I would like to just write down my opinion about that.
>>> I would like to write down my opinion about that.
I think we can give penalty them who are bullying someone.
I think we can give penalty them who are bullying someone.
>>> I think we can give penalty to those who bully someone.
The penalty can be effective whenever their life.
>>> The penalty can be effective as long as they live.
For example if you were bullying someone in elementary school, you have a minus point to enter middle school, high school, university and to get a job.
For example if you were bullying someone in elementary school, you have a minus point to enter middle school, high school, university and to get a job.
>>> For example, if you were bullying someone in elementary school, you can get minus points when entering middle school, high school, university and getting a job.
And we can give high fine to their parents.
And we can give high fine to their parents.
>>> And we can impose high fine to their parents.
It can makes parents perform education to their children do not bullying someone.
>>> It can make parents educate to their children not to bully someone.
I think that bullying is really bad things.
I think that bullying is really bad things.
>>> I think that bullying is really bad.
It can make someone\'s life really really not good.
>>> It can make someone\'s life miserable.
So I think powerful punishment is needed to prevent bullying.
>>> So I think, strong punishment is needed to prevent bullying.
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