I think Seoul is the best city in Korea.

2021-11-27 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I can confidently say that Seoul is the best city in Korea. Of course, I have lived in other regions for up to 30 years and my hometown is more familiar, but I can do anything in Seoul and there are many great opportunities and facilities. Some people may say, a seaside city like Busan, or jeju island, but it is definitely Seoul to me. I am experiencing more than I enjoyed in my hometown for 30 years now in Seoul for 13 years. Museums, amusement parks, theme parks, many restaurants, various department stores, marts, etc. The places are very close. Even if you have a car, you can travel anywhere in the east/west/south/north of Seoul on weekends. Although the population is too large and there are traffic jams, i will also work in Seoul if i has to live in one place again in Korea.

강사 첨삭

Hi Evan:)

I actually heard a lot of great things about Seoul. It\'s very convenient to live there. The amenities and facilities are very good. ^^

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I can confidently say that Seoul is the best city in Korea.
>> I can confidently say that Seoul is the best city in South Korea.

Of course, I have lived in other regions for up to 30 years and my hometown is more familiar, but I can do anything in Seoul and there are many great opportunities and facilities.
>> Of course, I have lived in other regions for up to 30 years and my hometown is more familiar, but I can do anything in Seoul.  There are many great opportunities and facilities here. 

Some people may say, a seaside city like Busan, or jeju island, but it is definitely Seoul to me.
>> Some people may say, a seaside city like Busan, or Jeju island is the best city, but it is definitely Seoul for me.

I am experiencing more than I enjoyed in my hometown for 30 years now in Seoul for 13 years.
>> I am experiencing more than I enjoyed in my hometown for 30 years compared to my stay here in Seoul for 13 years.

Museums, amusement parks, theme parks, many restaurants, various department stores, marts, etc.
>> There are museums, amusement parks, theme parks, many restaurants, various department stores, marts, and many more. 

The places are very close.
>> The places are very close to each other. 

Even if you have a car, you can travel anywhere in the east/west/south/north of Seoul on weekends.
>> If you have a car, you can travel anywhere in the east/west/south/north of Seoul on weekends.

Although the population is too large and there are traffic jams, i will also work in Seoul if i has to live in one place again in Korea.
>> Although the population is too large and there are traffic jams in Seoul. I will still work in Seoul even if I have to live in another place in South Korea. 

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