I think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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These days people are so busy. So their’s body can easily broke and they don’t have much time to rest. Older and older they get their body will more broke. When they get old they are going to have a lot of free time. They can rest when they got old. Living life’s disadvantage is for who is poor. So I think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Hi Sophia~! ^^ I\'m sorry I wasn\'t able to talk to yesterday because I had a sorethroat. I hope to see you tomorrow. You have a great time! ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
These days people are so busy.
>>> CORRECT
So their’s body can easily broke and they don’t have much time to rest.
>>>So their body could easily break and they don’t have much time to rest.
Older and older they get their body will more broke.
>>> As they get older, their body will get weaker.
When they get old they are going to have a lot of free time.
>>> When they get older they are going to have a lot of free time.
They can rest when they got old.
>>> They can take a rest when they get older.
Living life’s disadvantage is for who is poor.
>>> Living life’s disadvantages is less fortunate people.
So I think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
>>> CORRECT
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