I think there is no end to learning, and the continuation of life is endless self-improvement.

2024-04-17 · 첨삭 강사 Cathy

학생이 쓴 원문

Self-improvement is the act of going where it is necessary for one\'s own development. Everyone knows nothing when we first come out into the world. I think it is to be educated at home and in society and to develop personality and intelligence. We are born without knowing anything from the beginning, and gradually develop knowledge by necessity, receive protection from society, and then go through the process of becoming a member of society. In this process, I get to know what I like and dislike, and it is also an opportunity to get to know myself better. Therefore, I think self-improvement is necessary to be full of members of society and myself.

강사 첨삭

Hi Da [이름], 

Your perspective on self-improvement is insightful! You\'re right; learning is a lifelong journey that helps us understand ourselves better and become valuable members of society. Your thoughtful approach to personal development is inspiring. 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

Self-improvement is the act of going where it is necessary for one\'s own development. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Self-improvement involves addressing areas that are essential for one\'s personal growth. 

Everyone knows nothing when we first come out into the world. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>When we first enter the world, we know nothing. 

I think it is to be educated at home and in society and to develop personality and intelligence. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>I believe that education at home and in society helps to shape our personality and intelligence. 

We are born without knowing anything from the beginning, and gradually develop knowledge by necessity, receive protection from society, and then go through the process of becoming a member of society. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>We start life with no knowledge, gradually acquiring it out of necessity, receiving support from society, and eventually becoming integrated members of it. 

In this process, I get to know what I like and dislike, and it is also an opportunity to get to know myself better. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>We start life with no knowledge, gradually acquiring it out of necessity, receiving support from society, and eventually becoming integrated members of it. 

Therefore, I think self-improvement is necessary to be full of members of society and myself. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Therefore, I think self-improvement is crucial for both personal fulfillment and societal contribution. 

 

 

 

 

 

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