I think true loyalty requires unconditional support.

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I think true loyalty requires unconditional support.

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First of all, most sons and daughters receive unconditional support from their parents.

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What I mean is that because they receive unconditional support from their paretns, they love their parents and can have true loyality.

>> What I mean is that because they receive unconditional support from their paretns, they love their parents and can have true loyalty.

They even obey their parents when they are young.

>> CORRECT!
Also, among religion, it can be proved.

>> Also, among religions, it can be proven.

For example, Christians think they receiced unconditional benefit from Jesus.

>> For example, Christians think they received an unconditional benefit from Jesus.

Therefore, they always try to follow Jesus and read bible.

>> Therefore, they always try to follow Jesus and read the bible.

Unconditional support means a lot to them so they can have true loyalty about God.

>> Unconditional support means a lot to them so they can have true loyalty from God.
For these reasons, I think true loyalty requires unconditional support.

>> CORRECT!