I think video game is not good for me.
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi Cherry ~ :)
From now on I will tell you about my opinion.
I think, video game is not good for me.
because usually I\'m working every weekdays.
and I can take a rest just for two days( saturday and sunday)
If I. play video game every weekend that makes me feel waste time all day long.
I have to do. something more valuable things at same times
for example, reading books, going somewhere to get good product for me, play with my pets ;)
I don\'t like to use time for playing video game in my life.
Thank you for reading my story so far~!
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]-Li! :)
Thank you for taking the time to write something. ^_^ We haven\'t talked in a while and I miss you. I hope you\'re doing great my dear. See you in our next class. :)
~Charry
Thank you for taking the time to write something. ^_^ We haven\'t talked in a while and I miss you. I hope you\'re doing great my dear. See you in our next class. :)
~Charry
Hi Cherry ~ :)
>> Hi, Charry! :)
From now on I will tell you about my opinion.>> CORRECT!
I think, video game is not good for me.
>>I think a video game is not good for me.
because usually I\'m working every weekdays.
>> It\'s because I usually work on weekdays.
and I can take a rest just for two days( saturday and sunday)
>> I can only take a rest for two days and that\'s on Saturdays and Sundays.
If I. play video game every weekend that makes me feel waste time all day long.>> If I play video games every weekend, that would make me feel like I have wasted my entire weekend.
I have to do. something more valuable things at same times
>> I have to do more important things in my free time.
for example, reading books, going somewhere to get good product for me, play with my pets ;)>> For example, reading books, going somewhere to get good products for me, and playing with my pets. ;)
I don\'t like to use time for playing video game in my life.
>> I don\'t like using my time playing video games.
Thank you for reading my story so far~!
>> Thank you for reading my story so far!
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