I thought I told you it when we were in our class..

2014-10-12 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

I thought I told you it when we were in our class. but I'm a good guy, so I tell you it once more. When I got angry about something, I need time to break which make me calm down. A person who get angery easily makes a mistake especially their talking. Slip of the tongue may make matter worse. So I seek a time to rest, and When I got a time, I take a sleep. I can think it twice during sleeping, which can make a better decision. Of course, It is simple to speak to another person with angry sound. I agree that It can be the another way to solve my angry. but I think it is not good way. because I don't have to 'contaminate' other people with my anger. Try to understand other peopls' situation first, and then, I talk to them. It is the way to deal with my anger.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]!
Thanks for another composition.
I am glad that you listen to other people first.
We need to know both sides first before doing an action. 
And we should always try to be calm. 
Have a great day. 
Teacher Nina

I thought I told you it when we were in our class.
>> I thought I told you this during our class. 
but I\'m a good guy, so I tell you it once more.
>> I\'m a good guy so, I tell it to you again.
When I got angry about something, I need time to break which make me calm down.
>> Did you mean: When I am mad about something, I need time which can calm me down.
>> OR: When I am angry about something, I need break which can help me calm down. 
A person who get angery easily makes a mistake especially their talking.
>> Did you mean: A person who gets mad easily can make a mistake especially with the words/ sentences they utter. 
Slip of the tongue may make matter worse.
>> Slip of the tongue might make matter worse. 

So I seek a time to rest, and When I got a time, I take a sleep.
>> So I seek time to rest and sleep. 
I can think it twice during sleeping, which can make a better decision.
>> Did you mean: I can think about it twice after sleeping, which can lead to a better decision.
>> OR: After taking a rest, I can think about it more which can lead to a better decision. 

Of course, It is simple to speak to another person with angry sound. 
>> Did you mean: Of course, it is simple to talk to another person in a high tone voice.
>> OR: Of course, it is easy to talk to another person with an angry voice.
I agree that It can be the another way to solve my angry. but I think it is not good way. 
>> I agree that there is another way to solve my anger but I think it is not in a good way. 
because I don\'t have to \'contaminate\' other people with my anger.
>> Because I don\'t have to vent out my anger to other people. 

Try to understand other peopls\' situation first, and then, I talk to them.
>> I try to understand other people\'s situation first and then I talk to them. 
It is the way to deal with my anger
>> Correct
>> OR: It is the best way to deal with my anger. 

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