I tried to change my life style especially in sleeping.

2014-06-12 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I tried to change my life style especially in sleeping. There are many things which I wanted to achieve, so that I planed to reduce my sleeping time. I did my best to reduce the time but whenever I slept less than 6 hour, I started dozing even in my work time. Additionally, My body was getting stressed and felt tired easily. And then I thought that the thime I sleep was same as I doze. so I realized that It was no use to try to reduce sleeping time. so I gave up my plane to reduce sleeping time. I wanted to be a good body shape and to study more but It was to hard to get used to it.

강사 첨삭

Good evening [이름]!

OH! I know you can do it! You just have to believe in yourself.

Always keep an eye on your goal.

Don\'t give up easily.

The more challenges you have, the more opportunities will come.
Talk to you tomorrow. Good night.

Teacher Nina


I tried to change my life style especially in sleeping.

>> Correct! ( check: lifestyle ^^)
There are many things which I wanted to achieve, so that I planed to reduce my sleeping time.

>> There are many things I want to achieve, so I planned to reduce the time I sleep.
>> OR: There are a lot of things that I want to achieve, so I planned to reduce the hours of sleeping.

I did my best to reduce the time but whenever I slept less than 6 hour, I started dozing even in my work time.

>> Did you mean: I did my best to reduce the time but whenever I sleep for less than six hours, I feel sleepy at work.

Additionally, My body was getting stressed and felt tired easily.

>> Additionally, I get easily tired and stressed.

>> OR: I easily get tried and feel stressed these days.

And then I thought that the thime I sleep was same as I doze.

>> And then I thought that the time I sleep is the same time I doze.

so I realized that It was no use to try to reduce sleeping time.

>> So, I realized that it is useless to reduce the time I sleep.

>> OR: So, I realized that it is useless to reduce my hours of sleep.
so I gave up my plane to reduce sleeping time.
>> So I gave up my plan to reduce it. ( check: plan ^^)


I wanted to be a good body shape and to study more but It was to hard to get used to it.

>> Correct!

>> OR: I wanted to be fit and to study hard but it was difficult for me to get used to it.

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