I used to doing my creative things it was just only to my pleasure.
학생이 쓴 원문
I have a lot of electric appliances like computer, and radio.
It is my only thing that I can handle with my own.
Computer is upgrading fast as times go by.
And it has become a great thing in my daily days.
I used to chatting with foreigners on the internet in the midnight but it is failed because my English skill is weak.
Thanks for reading.
Bye.
강사 첨삭
Hello again, Wee!
Thanks for doing your homework ^^
I hope you are having a great night.
Keep writing ☺
I have a lot of electric appliances like computer, and radio.
>> I have a lot of gadgets like computer.
>> I have a lot of gadgets like computer.
It is my only thing that I can handle with my own.
>> It is the only thing that I can handle on my own.
>> It is the only thing that I can handle on my own.
Computer is upgrading fast as times go by.
>> The computer upgrades as time goes by.
>> The computer upgrades as time goes by.
And it has become a great thing in my daily days.
>> It also has become a great thing to use on a daily basis.
>> It also has become a great thing to use on a daily basis.
I used to chatting with foreigners on the internet in the midnight but it is failed because
my English skill is weak.
>> I used to chat with foreigners on the internet at midnight but I failed because my English skills aren\'t that good.
>> I used to chat with foreigners on the internet at midnight but I failed because my English skills aren\'t that good.
Thanks for reading.
Bye.
Bye.
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