I want to be a boss, but it\'s not good for me
학생이 쓴 원문
Someday, I want to be president or boss of some company. Most boss of company earn lots of money. It means I can live comfortable of rich if I become a boss of some company. It will be very good life and I can help my country by pay lots of my tax. However, my MBTI is not good at leading. So frankly, I want to be some job that don\'t be leader but earn pretty much money. I think boss is one of the danger jobs. If I make some mistakes, then there will be damage to employees of my company. In conclusion, lots of people including me want to be a boss, but I think I shouldn\'t be a boss. Instead of it, I think being some jobs that are following will be good for me.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Daniel! Thank you for
doing your homework! I think you shouldn\'t rely much on the MBTI. If you want to pursue something, do it. Put a lot of effort and hard work to get it. Don\'t let some personality test stop you.
- Teacher Debbie
>> Someday, I want to be the president or boss of some company.
Most boss of company earn lots of money.
>> Most bosses earn lots of money.
It means I can live comfortable of rich if I become a boss of some company.
>> They live comfortable lives. If I became the boss of some company, I could also live a comfortable life.
It will be very good life and I can help my country by pay lots of my tax.
>> It would be a very good life, and I could help my country by paying my tax.
However, my MBTI is not good at leading.
>> However my MBTI says I am not good at leading.
So frankly, I want to be some job that don\'t be leader but earn pretty much money.
>> Therefore, I want a job that doesn\'t need me to be a leader but could still earn much money.
I think boss is one of the danger jobs.
>> I think being a boss is one of the hardest jobs.
If I make some mistakes, then there will be damage to employees of my company.
>> If I made some mistakes, it could hurt the employees of my company.
In conclusion, lots of people including me want to be a boss, but I think I shouldn\'t be a boss.
>> In conclusion, lots of people, including me, want to be a boss, but I think I shouldn\'t be a boss.
Instead of it, I think being some jobs that are following will be good for me.
>> Instead, I think being a follower would be good for me.
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